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Q: what does ; mean? what is the role of ; in writting.

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Does It means 'but' 'however'?
Q: 3.What role should the central government play in determining school curriculums?
It is often discussed that the central government should take the initiative to determine school curriculums. I have two points to describe the role of the central government.
First, the ways to educate students so highly depend on teacher’s individual discretion that the government need to determine the essential pillar of the education. Nowadays, the ways to deal with students are becoming more difficult, thus it is imperative to determine the pillar. By doing so, teachers can show their abilities to educate students even though students have their own characteristics.
Second reason is to set the concrete goal of education in order to letting the students to become as the people who are leading Japan. It is often said that children are the treasure of the nation, thus it is necessary to show the goal of the ideal people. For example, the current goal of the students is fostering the ability to live. Based on this goal, various people involve the educational activities to foster students. Therefore, setting a concrete goal is necessary for the central government to make a clear pillar.
In conclusion, I believe that the central government should determine school curriculums because the ways to educate are so highly depends on teachers and setting a concrete goal of education.
Does this sound natural?
A: × It is often discussed that the central government should take the initiative to determine school curriculums.
✓ I often hear discussions about the central government taking the initiative to determine school curriculums.

【作文ですので、passive voiceを避けましょう】

× I have two points to describe the role of the central government.
✓ I have two points to describe their role.

【全文にもcentral governmentがありました。Theirに書き換えても意味が変わらないので、シンプルに書きましょう。】

× First, the ways to educate students so highly depend on teacher’s individual discretion that the government need to determine the essential pillar of the education.
✓ First, the government needs to decide on the essential pillars of curriculums because higher education depends on the discretion of individual teachers.

× Nowadays, the ways to deal with students are becoming more difficult, thus it is imperative to determine the pillar.
✓ Nowadays it is becoming more difficult to deal with students, thus it is imperative to determine these pillars.

【ways to deal with students are becoming more difficultは何の話でしょうか?学生たちはよく暴れるということですか?それとも最近の先生方のスキルが低いので学生たちを指導するのは難しい話でしょうか?できるだけはっきりとしたフレーズを使いましょう。】

× By doing so, teachers can show their abilities to educate students even though students have their own characteristics.
✓ By doing so, teachers can show their abilities to educate students even though each student has his or her own characteristics.

【これがrole1であれば、もっと早く述べた方が良いと思います。】

× Second reason is to set the concrete goal of education in order to letting the students to become as the people who are leading Japan.
✓ The second role of the central government in determining school curriculums is to build a foundation for future Japanese leaders.

【課題は理由ではなくて、roleですので少し書き換えました。】

× It is often said that children are the treasure of the nation, thus it is necessary to show the goal of the ideal people.
✓ "Children are the treasure of the nation" is a common saying. It is necessary to show them appropriate, ideal goals.

【Passive voiceを避けましょう。また、文章が飛んでいる気がしますのでthusを削除しました。Ideal peopleというフレーズも気になりますので、変な解釈で捉えないように少し更新しました。】

× For example, the current goal of the students is fostering the ability to live.
✓ For example, the current the goal is to foster the students' life skills.

【政府の目標なのか、生徒の目標なのかはっきり書きましょう。】

× Based on this goal, various people involve the educational activities to foster students.
✓ Based on this, various people are involved in their educational activities.

× Therefore, setting a concrete goal is necessary for the central government to make a clear pillar.

Therefore, to unify all of these people the central government needs to establish a clear curriculum.

× In conclusion, I believe that the central government should determine school curriculums because the ways to educate are so highly depends on teachers and setting a concrete goal of education.
✓ 【下記ご参照ください】

I love how you weave different words into the essay. It was fun to read. I corrected each sentence individually, but I have some comments as well for you to consider.

First, try to avoid passive voice. I don't know if you have been introduced to passive/active voice, but simply speaking 'active voice' has a clear subject while 'passive voice' does not. 言う is active voice, 言われる is passive voice. I was always taught that passive voice is not appropriate for essays, so try to avoid it.

Secondly, beware of 起承転結. This is a Japanese format for reasoning, and is not as common in English. State your points first, then explain.

Thirdly, please note that the question is not "WHY should the central government determine school curriculums?" The prompt is "WHAT role should the central government play in determining school curriculums?" At some points during your essay I wondered if you misread the question. For example, "Therefore, setting a concrete goal is necessary for the central government to make a clear pillar." does not clearly answer the question.

I hope this helps! My points above are very specific, but you seem to have a strong grasp of English already. Good luck!

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